IF ONLY - Treatment

Thought of a new idea! What do you think of this, in comparison to the other idea?

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Tim, an average 21 year old college student, enters a small comic book store. He passes the store owner, a friendly, chubby looking Asian guy with plugs in his ears, who greets him. Vincent acknowledges the store owner, and looks around. He peruses the isles of comic books, picking one up of interest to him. As he reads the comics, he looks up from the book, secretly observing the other people around him. Nearby, a tall nerdy looking guy with pens in his pocket holder stands, enthralled in a Superman comic.

Tim’s eyes snap to a pretty girl standing at a counter at the back of the store talking to a rocker-looking guy. They make eye contact, which is quickly broken by the rocker guy who seems to be flirting with her. Tim turns the page of his comic book, pretending to read as he watches them.

All of a sudden, the rocker guy tries to kiss the girl. The girl, disgusted, pushes the rocker guy away from her. He falls to the ground, but instead of looking defeated, a large, evil smile curls around his face. He starts to laugh hysterically, as everyone in the store looks up to see what is wrong, except for the tall nerdy guy, who seems to be completely oblivious to the whole situation.

In the eyes of the rocker guy, a strange glint appears. He suddenly grabs the girl hostage. His arm forms into a giant gun and he starts shooting like a madman. Everyone in the comic book store ducks. The nerdy guy is shot. Seemingly unconscious, he falls onto the stack of comic books right in front of Tim.

As the rocker guy is shooting, Tim quickly maneuvers between the stacks, careful to not be seen. The store owner tries to reason with the rocker dude with cash, but the rocker dude doesn’t want cash. He’s just crazy. He starts shooting again, destroying the entire interior of the store. The store owner’s arm is shot, leaving him wounded. He ducks as the ceiling starts to crumble.

With a sudden streak of courage, Tim grabs a broken shelf piece hurls it at the rocker dude, slamming the gun-arm into the wall and destroying it. Tim runs to the girl, and asks if she is okay. She seems helpless. The rocker guy menacingly gets up, and grabs Tim by the shirt. Before Tim can react, the rocker guy laughs hysterically, and throws Tim across the store, breaking the shelves and framed posters on the wall. Tim grimaces. The store owner shouts to him, throwing a hang gun his way. The rocker guy approaches Tim and tries to kick/punch him, but Tim ducks and rolls, barely missing the blow. He starts shooting at the rocker guy, who quickly dodges. The rocker guy pounces on Tim and knocks his head. As Tim is down, he picks him up by the shirt and hurls him out of the store, breaking the pane glass windows.

The rocker guy struts over to Tim, getting ready to make his final move. All of a sudden, the nerdy guy appears with a Dragonball Z outfit, hair and everything. The rocker guy turns instantly amused. He hysterically runs toward the nerdy guy. The nerdy guy blasts a Kamehameha…

"HELLO?". Tim snaps out of his daydream to see the girl staring right at him, carrying a box of comics. He blushes, awkwardly looking around. Her personality seems a lot less girly than he thought, more confrontational and strong. She tells him that he was zoned out for a while, and which freaked her out for a second. She asks if he needs any help finding anything. He shakes his head. She smiles matter-of-factly at him, and walks by. The rocker guy seems to be amusing himself with some vinyl toys, waiting for the girl. The store owner is watching anime on the tiny TV next to him. The nerdy guy is still reading DBZ comics. Everything is as usual.