IF ONLY (tentative title) - DRAFT SIX

Joseph, a nervous and rigid-looking 21 year old college student, enters a small comic book store. He passes Kevin, the store owner, who is busy picking at his belly button. He peruses the isles of comic books, picking one up of interest to him. As he reads the comics, he looks up from the book, secretly observing the other people around him. Nearby, Ralph, tall awkward-looking policeman, stands, enthralled in a comic called “SUPERZOMBIES!”.

Joseph’s eyes snap to a Helen, a dorky-looking, sarcastic-seeming girl who is unpacking boxes while talking to Ray-ray, a rocker-looking guy. They make eye contact, which is quickly broken by Ray-ray who seems to be flirting with her. Helen is smirking at Ray-Ray while chewing gum, clearing entertained by Ray-ray’s ridiculous actions. Joseph turns the page of his comic book, pretending to read as he watches them.

All of a sudden, Ray-ray tries to kiss Helen. Helen, slightly taken aback (but more apathetic than anything else), spits her gum into Ray-ray’s hair. Ray-ray pauses for a moment, not quite sure what had just happened. He reaches up to touch the piece of gum on top of his head. He starts to scream is horror. Gradually, the scream turns into a hysterical laugh. Ray-ray is extremely loud but Joseph is the only one who seems to take notice. Ralph and Kevin seem completely oblivious.

Ray’s arm forms into a giant gun. He points it at Helen, who seems barely shocked. Joseph impulsively runs and grabs Ray, jerking him backwards. He punches him as hard as he can, causing Ray to merely stumble a bit. Joseph gets a little gum on his hands, which he tries to peel off, disgusted.

Ray turns his attention to Joseph. He smiles, wiping the blood off his mouth. Ray starts shooting like a madman as Joseph runs for cover, doing a little “dance” as he dodges the bullets. He runs for cover under one of the shelves near Ralph. Ray shoots relentlessly, accidentally killing Ralph in the crossfire. Helen watches the battle apathetically, popping another piece of gum into her mouth. She smiles, warmed by Joseph’s efforts.

Joseph grabs Ralph’s gun and starts shooting back at Ray. Ray dodges easily and gracefully, maneuvering through the book stacks as if he were a ballerina. Kevin, the storeowner, seems to be completely oblivious to the whole situation. Bullets fly, but he seems completely unhurt. Joseph runs out of bullets, throws the gun to the side and ducks for cover near dead Ralph. He looks over at Ralph, and notices a shine in his glasses…something is not right.

Bullets in his chest, Ralph arises from the dead as a zombie. He gets on all fours and starts crawling around trying to bite off Joseph’s legs. Joseph runs for his life. Ray starts to shoot, but when he sees the zombie, he stops shooting at Joseph and starts shooting at the zombie. Ray and Joseph join together and run from the zombie, climbing on top of a bookshelf. Helen, in the meantime, is having a smoke in the corner, enjoying the show.

Kevin is still watching his TV, ignoring the whole battle. As Zombie Ralph passes by Kevin, Ray shoots, accidentally shooting Kevin in the head. The bullet, however, merely bounces off his head. Kevin finally turns around, clearly irritated. He gets up and starts to bellow. A large monster begins to form out of his belly button….

Joseph snaps back to reality: Ray is still screaming his head off because of the gum in his hair. Helen tells him to quit being a baby. Helen walks over to the cupboard near Joseph. Joseph watches her, not realizing that he’s staring right at her. She looks at him and bluntly says, “WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU LOOKING AT?” Completely embarrassed, Joseph tries to save face by hiding himself in the book and looking elsewhere. Helen stares at him for a bit. Joseph peaks over his book to see if she’s still looking. She smirks.


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notes: need to makes some edits on the character designs.
- perhaps rewrite the ending to make it not a dream